This is predominantly a partner dancing forum, so you'd probably get better advice from a forum where they focus more on this style of dance. I don't even know what kind of career path there is for this kind of dance, let alone whether this is a good example of it. Good luck, though!
tbh, this looks like one of the bad auditions on SYTYCD. I'm not sure what exactly it is you are doing. Not much of anything that is visually interesting or unexpected. I second mr4styles' suggestion to pursue formal training, but I wouldn't pin your hopes on a career at this point.