I haven't looked at it in enough detail to be certain, but I'm sure you're right. The IDTA one isn't any different (but is also full of silly errors, like having the follower pivot on the free leg - what?).
I am still of the view that it is possible to adequately describe the typical execution of a standard action, using the vocabularly of dance technique. It would only be of use to teachers (probably), or more specifically, it would only be comprehensible by those trained in the use of such language. Technical texts are very dangerous, indeed, in the wrong hands.